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Writing Samples
Band 2

*In the last 20years, there has been significant development in the field of information technology (IT), for example in World wide web and communication by email. However these development in IT are likely to have more negative effects than positive in the future.* *To wat extent do you agree with this view* *Give reasons for your answer and give any example from your own experience or knowledge*

I don't agree with the topic. Because,
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Although
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 there is more
a
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cheater or anything like that, IT give us more positive in our life. Like
before
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 there is email or telephone in
this
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word
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world
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 we use
a
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mail
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email
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, the
mail
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email
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it
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will take
longer
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a longer
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time
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 to reach the destination. When the IT get a development, the world can use
an
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Email and telephone,
this
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technolgy
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technology
help
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 us to make a efficient
time
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 than
a
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convensional
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conventional
 mail. We can
give
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send
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 an email to other people in a far destination
with
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more
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a more
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 efficient
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time
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. The development in IT
make
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allows
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 us to save
the
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time
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 to make or develop something new.
Beside
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that
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 IT can
make
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help
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 us
to
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develop something like a car, military vehicle, electronic gadget, and many more. Because
that
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I don't agree with the topic,
like
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as
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 I
say
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said
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 before
development
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, development
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 in IT
is have
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has
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 more positive
effect
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effects
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 than
a
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apply
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negatif
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negative
effect
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effects
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structure
Plan a short intro that says your view clearly. Then write 2 or 3 body parts with a clear reason for each. End with a short closing line.
language
Use easy, common words. Use simple links such as and, but, also, for example.
content
Give a real example from your life or from what you know to show a point.
content
Your view against the statement is clear.
language
You name real IT things like email and time saved.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information
  • technology
  • web
  • internet
  • email
  • device
  • phone
  • computer
  • access
  • learn
  • work
  • connect
  • change
  • risk
  • benefit
  • privacy
  • security
  • distraction
  • misinformation
  • data
  • regulation
  • policy
  • education
  • skill
  • digital literacy
  • balance
  • future
  • trend
  • opportunity
  • problem
  • solution
  • health
  • business
  • global
  • local
  • growth
  • efficiency
  • trust
  • fake news
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