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Many of the world’s cities are currently facing a serious housing shortage. What are some of the reasons for this shortage, and what solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In
this
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 contemporary scenario, there is a lack of accommodation
facility
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facilities
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into
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in
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 the different cities of the world.
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,
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urbanization
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Urbanisation
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 is the main cause of
this
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 phenomenon
but
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 it can be solved by providing all the modern amenities to the small
towns
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. So,
this
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 essay will discuss
its
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apply
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certain reasons and give some possible solutions to mitigate
this
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 growing issue.
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 with, because of having quality of life in the city ,
people
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 are rapidly moving to the big
towns
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 for their better future.
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,
due to
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 the
advance
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 facilities in
to
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the city like good medical and educational services, individuals prefer to move
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to in
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in
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an
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 urban
area
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then
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small
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a small
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town
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.
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, young
people
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 from villages usually migrate
in
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to the metropolis cities in order to complete their higher education.
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, the masses in the small
towns
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 not only
incounter
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encounter
 the shortages of employment but
also
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 limited access to the shops and malls to get basic goods, which compel them to move
fom
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from
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the country
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country side
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countryside
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 to urban
centers
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centres
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. To make it clearer, the number of industries and
makets
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markets
 in the small
town
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 is
comparingly
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 low than
metro
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the metro
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area
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.
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, it is hard to get employment and purchase daily use stuff for those
whom
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who
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 live in that
area
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.
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,
people
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 from small
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town
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towns
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 choose to live in
downtowns
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downtown
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.
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areas.
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 One of the effective
approach
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 to control
this
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 trend is improving the countryside with
superier
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superior
 infrastructure and facilities.
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 as
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the
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 government of the
area
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 should invest more in small
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town
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towns
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 to
setup
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set up
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 industries and
local
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a local
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 market.
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, local
people
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 would get work
as well as
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easily
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 access to the market to grab everyday use items
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 they do not need to move anywhere.
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, local
council
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councils
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 should build new hospitals, medical
pharmacy
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pharmacies
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, and educational
institures
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institutions
, so that
,
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people
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 can live in
village
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villages
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 and get suitable medical aid and proper education
while
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 living there in small
towns
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. In conclusion,
people
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 are moving
tothe
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to the
 cities in order to live
better
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a better
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 lifestyle but confronting the issue of insufficient residency.
However
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,
this
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delimma
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dilemma
 can be controlled if
authority
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the authority
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facilate
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facilitates
 villages with
hospital
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a hospital
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, school, market, and schools.

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organization
Make a clear plan. Use intro, body, and conclusion in a simple, steady way.
grammar
Fix big grammar and spelling errors. Watch for word order and plural form.
vocabulary
Use simple words and short sentences. This helps care about your meaning.
content
Add real examples to show your points, not only ideas.
content
You show the main idea that city life can bring short in housing and that country areas can grow to help.
cohesion
You use link words like Thus and Consequently to show cause and effect.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rural-urban migration
  • natural population growth
  • economic inequalities
  • property prices
  • urbanization
  • housing demand
  • land scarcity
  • government policies
  • affordable housing
  • foreign investors
  • construction costs
  • labor costs
  • real estate market
  • housing crisis
  • residential development
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