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Some people say that the educational success of a student is the result of the work of a good teacher. Others say it depends on the character of the student. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Many individuals argue about the reasons for
students
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' success,
it
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whether it
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 is a mentor award or depends on people's mentality. In my view, it
more depends
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depends more
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 on
characteristics
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the characteristics
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 of a person, for reasons which I will explore in the following text. On the one hand, the teacher is one of the main parts of studying and they have to great influence, similar to their parents. If your mentor does not make you interested in their subject, it is one of the reasons
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 success.
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, when I was in school, I had a history coach, we were under fourteen years old , and definitely basic reading of the theme would not work, but the subject was really interesting , and after years, I studied it more.
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, a smart child will face difficulties in development when met with a bad teacher. A competent educator can offer children guidance through selected and proper materials to study
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 their own academic levels. They can
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 expose different kinds of studies to help
students
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 decide which direction they want to pursue.
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, teachers can show
students
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 how to utilise computers to learn coding or design graphics, which in turn can inspire children for the future. In conclusion, the hard work of
students
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 and teachers cannot be separated. To achieve academic success, children need to have a strong will and resilience to study under a qualified teacher.

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language
Fix grammar and word form errors to make the text clear. For example, 'great influence' should be 'great influence', and check plural and tense.
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Add small links between ideas to show how they fit together.
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Give more clear examples for each point, or add numbers or facts to back up ideas.
structure
State both views, then give your own view in a clear last line or sentence.
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There is a clear plan with introduction, body and conclusion.
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The writer shows a clear view in the start and ends with a short conclusion.
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An example is used to back a point.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • teacher
  • student
  • class
  • lesson
  • learn
  • study
  • work
  • effort
  • motivation
  • help
  • support
  • plan
  • goal
  • feedback
  • practice
  • habit
  • focus
  • time
  • family
  • home
  • school
  • result
  • success
  • score
  • grade
  • idea
  • view
  • opinion
  • care
  • team
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