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In some countries, people buy far more food than they need. As a result, a large amount of food is thrown away. Why do you think some people buy too much food? What could be done to reduce the amount of food that people throw away?

Nowadays, most
people
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 too much
food
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 than they actually need. There are a
lot
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 of causes, but based on
a
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 lifestyle everyone
have
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has
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 recently, it is caused by social
media
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. Social
media
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 plays a pivotal role in our
life
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lives
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, especially
due to
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globalization
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 and the use of AI, which
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has
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 been viral recently on the internet. Social
media
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also
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 gives lots of impact
to
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on
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 our
life
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,
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that
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 is why it has a
lot
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 of positive
yet
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and
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 negative
impact
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impacts
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.
Then
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, what is the correlation to
this
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 topic? Almost everyone
make
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makes
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 an account
in
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on
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 social
media
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, from teenagers to
elder
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older
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people
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,
wether
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whether
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 it is on Instagram, Facebook, Twitter,
Youtube
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YouTube
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, or even
Tiktok
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TikTok
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 to post about their thoughts, daily life, or even some important news so that
people
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could
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can
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 read them.
Moreover
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, some topic that they posted goes viral, and that can lead
people
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 to do the same thing or always
having
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have
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 an eye on that certain topic.
For example
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, there are a
lot
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 of trending foods to try
among
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around
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 the world and it was filmed by
food
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 vloggers. Once they post it on their account,
people
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 would watch their videos and would do anything to try them. When a
food
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 goes viral, there
would
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will
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 most likely be a long queue at the restaurant.
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, the remaining stocks will
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 in a moment after they restocked the
food
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. It leads to
a
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apply
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food
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 waste because
people
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 would most likely
threw
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throw
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 away their
food
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 if it doesn't
satisfied
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satisfy
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 them.
This
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behavior
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behaviour
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 will lead to so many negative impacts
to
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on
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 our planet. There would be a
lot
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 of
wastes
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waste
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, and some ingredients in the market would
decreased
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decrease
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 if it was not used wisely. We should take
a
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several actions to
reduced
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reduce
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food
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 waste.
First,
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we should stop hyping over every type of
food
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/
beverages
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beverage
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 that went viral on the internet. By doing
this
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, the
food
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 stocks will not
decreased
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decrease
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 quickly and everyone
could
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can
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 enjoy the
food
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 without it being thrown away by certain
people
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. After that, we should stop doing overconsumption.
People
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 should stop purchasing a
lot
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 of
food
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 at once. Rather than doing that, we should know our limit when we consume our
food
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, so we can
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purchase
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food
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 wisely. By doing these small steps, we can create a big impact because by doing
a
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apply
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smaller steps continuously,
this
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behavior
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behaviour
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 will stop in our society.

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structure
Offer a short, clear opening and a short ending.
organization
Put each idea in its own paragraph with a clear topic sentence.
language
Use simple and exact words, and check verb forms.
content
Add more basic facts or examples beyond social media, like shopping habits, deals, and meal planning.
content
The essay shows a link between social media and food waste.
structure
It gives some steps to cut waste.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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