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Band 4.5

In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

In recent years, some
people
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 believe that in the future, all
vehical
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vehicles
such
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 as
cars
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, buses and trucks will be driven by
autommatic
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automatic
 navigation and driving systems. All of those vehicles will be
driveless
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driverless
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car
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cars
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 and
people
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 will be
only
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the only
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 passengers because they do not have to drive
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the
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car
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 by themselves.
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, other
people
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 argue that
this
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wiould
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would
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a disadvantages
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disadvantages
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disadvantage
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 for
people
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. In my opinion, I think the benefits of driverless
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car
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cars
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 outweigh
its
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their
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 drawbacks. On the one hand, one of the advantages of robotic
cars
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 is convenience. When Artificial Intelligence
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called
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IA
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technologies
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, technologies
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 are now developed to become drivers,
people
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 do not need to drive
cars
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 by themselves.
As a result
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, human have more time to do whatever they want during commuting to their destinations
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such
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, such
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 as having
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a meal
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, participating meeting, and studying.
In addition
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,
advance
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transpot
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transport
technologies
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 provide more
securities
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security
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. As those machineries are programmed to prevent any
car
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accidences
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accidents
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. The driverless vehicles are created not only
censor
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, but
also
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 be
programmed
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program
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 the
trafiic
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traffic
 laws and
therefore
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, those
technologies
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 tend to follow the
trafic
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traffic
 laws
accordingly
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.
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 is the reason why the AI can provide safer
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.
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 the other hand, there are some disadvantages of the driverless technology.
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, the safety of the technology is not totally reliable. Their system cannot
gurantee
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guarantee
 that computer
error
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errors
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 will not
be
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occured
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occur
,
particulary
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particularly
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For instance
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, nowadays we receive news about
problems
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 with IT
securities
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security
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 that come in
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the form
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 of
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a virus
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virus computer
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. So, if those errors happen, it could lead to
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 issue.
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, those
cutting edge
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technologies
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 often come with
expensive
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an expensive
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 price because those advanced
technologies
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 require
extreamly
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extremely
 high investment, resulting in
expectation
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 of
trangible
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tangible
 return for producers
like
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, like
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high
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a high
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 price of products.
Therefore
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, some
people
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 who cannot afford those
cars
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 may have
problems
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and
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this
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 leads to unequal
problems
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 in many societies. In conclusion, in my perspective, the advantages of automatic
automoblies
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vehicles
 outweigh the disadvantages because the
problems
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mention
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mentioned
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 above could be
sloved
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solved
 by advanced
techonologies
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technologies
 in the future.

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task response
Try to add more clear ideas for both sides and give real life examples in each point.
structure
Use a clear plan for your write - one idea per para, and use sign words to show order and link ideas.
language
Fix spell and form work. Keep ideas simple and easy to read.
content
Note the rules of this topic so you discuss what is good and what is bad, and end with your view.
content
The essay shows a clear view that driverless cars can be good and bad.
content
There are some ideas about how safety and time can grow with new tech.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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