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Some people do not eat meat and fish. They think that it will better for health and also world. Discuss the the view and give you opinion. Essay for ielts writing part in 250 words into 40 minutes.

Some people have decided to be vegetarians. They do not consume chicken, beef, pork, or fish. They do
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 to become healthier and think it is good for the world. I disagree with the thought. For me, eating meat as a
protein
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 source is needed for metabolism. Humans are omnivores that need
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 as an energy source
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 carbohydrates. And we still save the world by consuming non-abusive farm animal processing. On the one hand, meat and fish are good for
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 as they produce energy and build the body's muscles. Proteins are needed for metabolism and tissue regeneration. All the cells in human bodies are ageing and require rebuilding. Without
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,
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 issues can occur in certain ways. Muscle and joint sores are the most common.
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, some people believe that
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 could be diverted into plant-based ones.
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, not all plant-based
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 sources can be digested and absorbed well by
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 digestive system. There are possibilities of getting hypersensitivity from grains
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 as soybeans that could impact
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. In my opinion, a variety of
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 sources is the best option for better
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. Even more, farm animals could produce nutrients for the soil and be used by the plants to grow. Both animals, plants, and humans are destined to live together. In conclusion, achieving a better world is not only about restraining people from eating meat and fish. We need many kinds of
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 sources to be healthier. As human beings, we have to be wise in using and reproducing either animal or plant resources to fulfil life's needs. Non-abusive slaughtering houses and organic planting should be supervised by the government.

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overall
Your essay shows you take a view and add some ideas. Plan with one main point in each paragraph and make your main point clear.
structure
Make a short intro that states the view and a short conclusion that restates it.
content
Give one clear example for each idea and use easy words.
content
You show a definite view and you say why you do not agree.
structure
You use linking words to show sides of the topic.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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