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Some people think when a person travels to a different culture they should adapt to local practices and cultures. to what extent do u agree or disagree

Traveling
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Travelling
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 allows us to reach new locations and
thus
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 opens
scope
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the scope
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 to meet with new cultures and practices. When the question
arise
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arises
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that
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apply
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whether
should we
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we should
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accustomed
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be accustomed
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with
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to
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 novelty or not
while
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 we travel,
this
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 essay will try to shed light on why
should we
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we should
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 align with new cultures and practices
while
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 we travel to a new location. First of all,
adaption
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adaptation
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with
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to
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 the
culture
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 and
practice
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 of a place helps us to understand
that
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the
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 locality and
people
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the people
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 better.
That is
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 to say, each locality has its own set of
culture
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, which is obviously different from
other
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others
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 and mingling with that
culture
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 will only allow us
understand
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to understand
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 it fully.
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, if a person travels to England and completely ignores English norms of life,
would
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they would
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 probably never understand England.
Secondly
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, learning
new
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about new
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 cultures of a
society
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thus
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 system of living is beneficial because it helps to modify another
society
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. To illustrate, if someone travels to a new
society
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, depicts a good
practice
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 from there and after returning to
home
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their home
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country
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country,
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 that good
practice
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 could be introduced here.
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, saying 'thank you' is
very
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a very
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 generous
practice
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 in English
society
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 and
thus
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soceities
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societies
 lacking
this
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 good habit can easily
amalmagate
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amalgamate
this
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practice
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 into their
soceities
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societies
. In conclusion, I express my strong agreement that we should adapt
with
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to
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 new ways of life
of
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in
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 the place where we travel and
thus
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, can under that locality better and
ameliorate
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improve
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 our own
culture
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.

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structure
Make each paragraph have one clear main idea and explain it with simple facts or examples.
content
Add one or two more good examples and note the other view to show balance.
language
Check for small spelling and grammar mistakes to make your meaning clear.
language
Use easy words the reader will know and keep sentences short.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas go from one to the next, like 'also', 'however', 'so' (but simple).
strength
Clear choice to agree with adapting to new cultures.
strength
Some good example use and clear paragraph structure.
strength
Shows a plan by giving an intro, body, and conclusion.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural adaptation
  • cultural assimilation
  • host country
  • local community
  • cultural faux pas
  • traditions and customs
  • cultural identity
  • values
  • ethical perspective
  • balanced approach
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