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The maps below shows university sports courts in 1990 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Assel

The maps below shows university sports courts in 1990 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Assel
The two maps demonstrate various
change
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 which took place in a
university
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sports
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court
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 . A glance at the two maps
reveal
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reveals
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 that
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sports
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the sports
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court
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 in a
university
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undergo
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via
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redevelopment and more
architectures
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are
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 erected. One change that
stand
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stands
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 out is that there was a modernisation
about
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of
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the sport
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sport
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sports
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court
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 over a period of
decade
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a decade
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 .
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Court
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The court
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start
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started
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 to dominate the whole amenity, many trees were
chop
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 down
and
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, and
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 the park was demolished
make
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to make
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 way for a basketball
court
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. The relocation of the tennis
court
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 was carried out in the bottom
left - hand
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 corner
and
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It
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it
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 was enlarged to 4 areas .
The similar
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 to a changing room which used to stay in the middle of a
university
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sports
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court
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 , it was relocated in front of a fitness centre which
located
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is located
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 in the upper
left - hand
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 corner. Striking information is that a pool, cafe and reception still stood as it had
and
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 the former was renovated to indoor
instead
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 of outdoor. In conclusion, there
are
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is
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 a new
university
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sports
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court
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 with a new large
sport
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sports
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court
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instead
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 of a
nature
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "instead".
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words university, sports, court with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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