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The pie chart below shows the revenue from five industries in Togo in 2000 and projections for 2050 Summarise information by selecting and reporting their main features, and make comparisons were relevant

The pie chart below shows the revenue from five industries in Togo in 2000 and projections for 2050 Summarise information by selecting and reporting their main features, and make comparisons were relevant
The pie charts illustrate five different categories of
industry
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income
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 in Togo in 2000 and 2050. The categories include
soft
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the soft
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 beverages
industry
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, real estate development, information services, life insurance and
semiconductor
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the semiconductor
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industry
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. In 2000, the information services and soft beverages
industry
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's
income
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 was a quarter of total
income
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, with 25
billion
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dollars
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 over a period. It was closely followed by real estate development, with each having 20
billion
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dollars
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 of the total.
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, the situation will have changed. Total
income
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 witnessed a twofold increase from 97
billion
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dollars
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 in 2000 to 196
billion
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dollars
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 in 2050. One of the first things to note is that the most revenue industries will semiconductor
industry
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, which has almost three quarters of the total
income
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. It is followed by the soft beverages
industry
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 and real estate development, accounting for 25%. Relatively low figures are observed in information services and life insurance, with both having 10% in 2050.
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, it can be clearly seen that in 2000, Togo's industrial revenues were largely driven by five categories of industries, but by 2050, the semiconductor
industry
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 would have seen the largest gains, with roughly three-quarters of its revenues expected to disappear.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words industry, income, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
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