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Some people consider that the education which is come from school is more important than learning in the family. Other people think the opposite way. Discuss both sides and give examples.

Some people believe that education that comes from school is more important than learning in the family,
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 others argue about it . In
this
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 essay, we will be discussing both views and explaining why I agree with the school education
instead
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 of family.
Moreover
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, every society has it's own thoughts but the majority of the population says that school is way much better than family
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 many reasons a renowned site has published a crazy info about
this
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 topic they talked about what they study inside the academy which is highly different than what we think the students learn from every teacher about a new subject daily
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 people who get science from their own families are 15% the remain 85% are getting their knowladge from schools so comparing both are not fair as far as I see there's is a terrfying Information coming from academies along to a student could be studying with a scientist or intellegent person.
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,
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 teaching in the facilities are much better and even for the brains it changed the manner of thinking and how they could grow up how smart are they a channel about literacy post that 75% of the young teenagers are smarter and the main factor is the teachers they get their data and the materials from alot of sources
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 the 25% who is learning from a family is taking info from one place
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, if you graduated from faculty you are likely to get a job faster because you will
also
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 get a degree after studying that reason alone is enough to know which is best between the 2 options years or experience and collecting info from teachers is appreciable. In conclusion, after considering both sides and giving examples about them, I strongly believe that the institute wins with a big difference, and there is no competition between them.

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structure
Make a plan before you write. Start with a short intro that states what you think, then two or three body parts, and finish with a short end that repeats your view.
coherence
Write one good idea in each paragraph and begin each paragraph with a simple sentence about that idea.
content
Give real and clear examples. Avoid long and fake numbers.
lexical
Keep simple words. Use common short forms to be easy to read.
grammar
Check spelling and grammar. Break long lines into two parts.
strength
The essay shows a clear view that school is better.
strength
There is an attempt to talk about both sides.
strength
A conclusion is given.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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