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In some countries young people work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university. What are main advantages and disadvantages?

There is no
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denying
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countries
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countries,
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 young
people
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 work or
travel
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 for a year between finishing high school and starting college.
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 it is a commonly held belief that many
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passengers
 nowadays
travel
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 for a long time to finish school or university.
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 essay will analyse
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 topic from both points of view and express my opinion. On one hand,some young
people
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travel
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 to finish
her
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their
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 education.It is
also
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 possible to say that some of them travelled to
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other
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countries
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 to
study
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maybe
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, maybe
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 because
a
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of a
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higher level in the country
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, or
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 maybe teaching
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is very
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 well.
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,
countries
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 are welcoming
a
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apply
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student
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students
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 from many different
countries
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 and places to
study
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 in
her
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their
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 country.
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example
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 my uncle
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went
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 to Australia
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, specifically
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in
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to
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 Berlin
to
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, to
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study
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 for a master's degree. On the
another
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other
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 hand,many
people
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 today
travel
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 to different
countries
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for studying
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to study
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.
In other words
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,
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travelling
 to improve her skills and try a few experiences
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, maybe
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know
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learn
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 a new language or culture.
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,I sea through social networks a young
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people
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person
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 from
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the united
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united
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United
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 arad emirates in Japan with
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a Japanese
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 family
he
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. He
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 told
hem
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them
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 about
history
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the history
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 of Japan and
her
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its
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 culture, so its a lot of reasons
about
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apply
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why
people
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travel
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for
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to
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study
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 and
this
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one
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is one
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 of the most common reasons. In conclusion, there are no easy answers to
this
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 question.On balance,
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,I tend to believe that I strongly believe
with
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this
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 topic because
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it has
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 many positive
impact
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impacts
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 returns to the students.

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coherence
Make a plan before you write. Put one clear idea in each paragraph and link them with simple words like and, but, also. This helps the flow.
grammar
Use correct grammar and form. Check verb tenses and plural words. Use 'is/are', 'has/have' in the right form.
task response
Give a clear answer to the question. State your view in the first or last sentence of the essay.
examples
Give a real example in a short, plain way to show your point.
structure
End with a short, strong conclusion that restates your view.
content
There is an effort to discuss both sides of the topic.
development
Some attempts to use examples.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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