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The diagram shows the process of making recycled paper from old newspaper

The diagram shows the process of making recycled paper from old newspaper
The picture given above shows several steps
to recycled
Change preposition
for recycling
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Use synonyms
papers
Fix the agreement mistake
paper
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.
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Overall
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Overall,
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this
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 process
consist
Correct subject-verb agreement
consists
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9
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of 9
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steps to complete; starting with
a teared
Verb problem
tearing
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Use synonyms
papers
Fix the agreement mistake
paper
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 and
dry
Wrong verb form
drying
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 it to close the stages. In the initial stage of recycling an old newspaper
some
Punctuation problem
, some
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papers
Use synonyms
 that
has
Correct subject-verb agreement
have
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 been
teared
Wrong verb form
torn are
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 placed in a bowl.
Then
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, add about 250 ml
water
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of water
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 into the bowl and wait for
1
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about 1
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hour
approximately
Rephrase
apply
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until it
soaked
Verb problem
is soaked
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. Once the
papers
Use synonyms
Verb problem
are soaked
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soaked
Punctuation problem
soaked,
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 mix it up with a mixer. After that
a
Punctuation problem
, a
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well mixed
Use the right word
well-mixed
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 paper
Verb problem
is place
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place
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placed
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 on a tray, by
also
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 adding 100 ml
water
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of water
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 more and genuinely
beat them
Wrong verb form
beaten
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 to make it flat. Moving on
the
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to the
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 closing stages, put a mesh underneath the
Wrong verb form
flattened
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flatten
Punctuation problem
flatten,
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 soaked paper and drain it directly,
then
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 put them into a newspaper and slide it with a roller. To finish it, let them dry
around
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for around
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 24 hours.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words papers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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