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The map below shows a traditional and modern two-storey Japanese house.

The map below shows a traditional and modern two-storey Japanese house.
The map gives information about a national and up-to-date two-storey
Japanese
Use synonyms
 house.
Overall
Linking Words
, before, in
Japanese
Use synonyms
houses
Add a comma
houses,
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 there were 3 rooms ,but now there are 3 bedrooms and one traditional room. As the map shows , in a Traditional
Japanese
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 house in the above corner, there was a cupboard , but in modern
Japanese
Use synonyms
 houses , it
wasn’t
Verb problem
hasn’t
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 changed. Before there was room one , but now it is
living
Verb problem
apply
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living-dining. The stairs place didn’t change , and the Entrance place didn’t change.
Before
Punctuation problem
Before,
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 there was
a
Correct article usage
no
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 kitchen,but now
this
Linking Words
 is a traditional room. Before, there were rooms two and three , but now,
this
Linking Words
 is bedroom two and bedroom three.In a traditional
Japanese
Use synonyms
 house, there was cup cupboard in belove corner but now it is a bedroom.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words japanese with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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