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You have a friend who has always liked the car you currently drive. Now you have decided to sell the car. You think your friend might be interested in buying it. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter, say why you want to sell your car describe the condition of the car invite the friend to come and see the car himself/herself someday

Dear Dhruvi, I hope you are doing well. I am writing
this
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 to inform you that I am planning to sell my Tesla Model 3 2024 Standard Range. When I decided to sell the
car
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, you were the first person
whom
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apply
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I thought
to
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of informing
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inform
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inform,
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 as I
know
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knew
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 that you
have
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had
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 always
enjoy
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enjoyed
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 driving it. I am selling
this
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car
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 as now my business has expanded in Northern Ontario,
therefore
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, I need a
car
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 that can drive at least
six-hundred
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six hundred
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kilometers
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kilometres
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 on a single charge
which
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, which
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 is not possible in my current
car
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.
Moreover
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,
this
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car
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only
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has only
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driven
Verb problem
been driven
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ten-thounsand
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ten thousand
kilometers
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kilometres
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 and
never
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has never
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 had any
accident
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.
Besides
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 that, I have always done all the services
on-time
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on time
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. The
car
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 comes with a free supercharge for a year and winter tyres.
Last
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 but not least, I would like to invite you to come and take a test drive before making any decision. Please feel free to come anytime
on
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apply
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this
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 weekend. Looking forward to
hear
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hearing
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soon from you
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from you soon
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. Kind regards, Ruchin Patel

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coherence cohesion
Break the letter into clear parts: one paragraph for why you sell, one for the car's condition, and one to invite a view. Start a new line for each paragraph.
task response
Use simple, correct sentences. Check grammar like 'I have decided to sell my car because…' and 'It has only been driven 10,000 kilometres.'
tone
Friendly tone and polite invite to test drive.
content
Gives numbers and facts about the car (miles, no crash, service on time) and a few extra perks.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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