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Every country in theworld has its own road rules but many drivers don't obey them why this happening what can be done to solve this issue

Several nation in the world has
its
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their
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 own
rules
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 and regulations which several drivers
not
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do not
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 obey because some are
the
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apply
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drug
addicted
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addicts
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 and
few
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a few
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 have not much experience.
While
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 some drivers
dod
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do
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 not know about
traffic
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rules
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.
While
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 there are certain causes
s
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apply
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of
this
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but
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, but
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 few measures could be taken to solve the hurdles.
Firstly
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, in some
countries
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countries,
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 they do not have their own
rules
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 and no
traffic
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 lights on
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the road
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road
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roads
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which
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, which
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create
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creates
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 many accidents and
traffic
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 which
sometime
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sometimes
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will take
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result
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 a loss of life.
Secondly
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, under eighteen are driving cars and bikes
which
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, which
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 creates many accidents. To solve
this
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 issue government will first need to
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make aware
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aware
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people aware
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people
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about
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of
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traffic
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rules
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then
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, then
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make sure
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ensure
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 that it will be followed by everyone. They made strict laws
according to
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rules
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if
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; if
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 someone
break
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breaks
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 the
rule
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rule,
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then
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it
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they
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 will be
highly
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heavily
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paid
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punished
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.
Then
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people
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 will know about the
traffic
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rules
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. So, they will need to
aware
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be aware
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people
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of people
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instead
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 of paying
challan
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a challan
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. Every country will need the
traffic
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 police to
avoid
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prevent
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people
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to break
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from breaking
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rules
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.
People
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 will
also
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 be careful about
traffic
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rules
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.
However
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, if someone breaks
rule
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the rule
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 and
get
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gets
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highly
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a high
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fine
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challan
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challan,
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 the government will suspend
his
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their
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 license for a longer period of time. That’s why
government
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the government
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 will
aware
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be aware
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people
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of people
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 about
traffic
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rules
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.
The
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If the
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people
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 know all the
rules
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 and
management
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management,
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then
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 they will be prevented from challan and will obey the
traffic
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rules
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 and regulations. In conclusion, every country is responsible for its own
citizen
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citizens
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 rights. They will give complete rights and
to
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apply
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guide about
rules
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 and regulations. They will need drivers to
aware
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be aware
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and
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of and
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 guide
about
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them about
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Use synonyms
rules
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the rules
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 to prevent
from
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apply
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accidents.

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task response
Plan your essay. Start with a short intro that states the topic. Then write three clear parts: causes, effects, and what to do. Finish with a short conclusion.
language use
Use simple, exact words. Do not mix many new ideas in one sentence. Give one idea per sentence and use linking words to show how ideas go together.
content
Give specific examples that can show your points, like age limits, and penalties that help people follow rules.
content
The essay tries to answer the task by talking about causes and ways to solve the issue.
structure
There is a conclusion that restates the topic.
content
Some ideas, like young drivers and penalties, are on the right track.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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