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Writing Samples
Band 2

Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart describes the level of
production
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 of the main fuels in the UK from 1981 to 2000.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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petroleum
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 was
succesfully
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successfully
 able to manage its position over the period of time, becoming the highest
production
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.
To begin
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 with, in 1981, approximately 90
units
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 of
petroleum
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was
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were
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 highly produced
and
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, and
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 it was about 10
units
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 higher than Coal's unit. Meanwhile, the figure for natural gas was at around 40
units
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, making it
as
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apply
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the lowest
production
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in
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apply
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this
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 year. For the following three years,
while
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 the
production
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 of
petroleum
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signifiantly
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significantly
 increased and reached a peak at 140
units
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, the trend for natural gas remained stable. Coal had experienced a dramatic decrease,
over
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by over
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a
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half, after trying to manage stable
production
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 for the past two years and after that rose again to 60
units
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. In 1986, all of
fuel
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the fuel
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 showed a stable
production
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.
However
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, the unit of
petroleum
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 produced fell
down
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dramatically to 100
units
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 in 1989. From
this
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 year, the figures for natural gas and
petroleum
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 slightly rose,
then
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going
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went
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 up to about 100 and 140
respectively
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, respectively
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in
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, in
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 2000.
On the other hand
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, Coal's
production
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experience
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experienced
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 a significant decrease to below 40
units
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.

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task response
Task response: Give a clear view of the chart. Say the main idea first and then give the key numbers for each fuel. Make sure the data you give fits the chart.
coherence
Coherence and cohesion: Use clear sentences in small groups. Start with an overview, then talk about the main changes, and end with a short note. Use simple link words to show order.
overview
Good start by naming petrol as the top fuel.
comparison
Some effort to compare fuels over time.
data
Some correct data points, like petrol rising to about 140.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Overview
  • Prominent
  • Characteristics
  • Elements
  • Stages
  • Aspects
  • Similarities
  • Differences
  • Contributing factors
  • Consequences
  • Outcomes
  • Summary
  • Implications
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