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The graph below shows the number of cars manufactured in 2020 with projections until 2035.

The graph below shows the number of cars manufactured in 2020 with projections until 2035.
The data presents the
amount
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number
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 of
cars
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 manufactured in 2020 and gives projections to 2035 .
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, in 2020,
Japan
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 is at the top of the list.
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, in
2035
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2035,
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Japan
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 will dramatically decline .
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 China is growing in the car manufacturing
while
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,
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 the UK and USA are lowering their investment in
cars
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 throughout the period .
Japan
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 started the year
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2020 with just under 400
thousand
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 , which is considered the highest . But, the rate began to strongly fall since 2026 until it
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will reach its lowest in 2035 .
Japan
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 will have around 100
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cars
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 annually in 2035.
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 , China started 2020 with approximately 100
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cars
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 and began to steadily grow until it reached the peak with about 150
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 . The UK started 2020 with 200
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cars
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 and began to decline annually until it reached
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ground
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low
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with
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 just above 40
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 in 2035 .
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, the USA showed approximately the same . The USA started 2020 with 300
thousand
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cars
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 and ended with just around 15
thousand
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cars
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, japan, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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