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Many people today use their phones for sending texts more than talking. What are the reasons for this? are there more advantages than disadvatages ?

In recent days, people have texted more than talked on their phones, which leads to
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public concern about the pros and cons
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. There are many reasons contributing to
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 issue. To start with, texting is fast and easy, which means you can send a short message in seconds without waiting.
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, People are occupied with their work and personal events.
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, texting
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 as a more flexible and convenient way by allowing them them reply later. Apart from that, texts
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 give a written record, making it easier for us to check details or plans later.
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, every coin has two sides. For one thing, Texting can show tone and meaning poorly
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 may lead to the
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 of the messages. For
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 thing, too much texting can reduce face-to-face talk and harm personal links. As we all
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,
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intrinsically prefer to live a group life than
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 life, which means texting may let us
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 from social
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 physically and mentally by
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 ourselves from authentic voices and touches in real
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. When it comes to weighing the advantages and disadvantages, I believe that the upsides of using texts outweigh the downsides, as convenience and
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efficiency
 are priorities for modern people, who occasionally get stuck in their work and lives,
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 the feeling of isolation and the mistake of misunderstanding can be reasonably avoided in advance. All in all, from my point of view, I have to admit that there are clear reasons for more texting, but it is best to use both forms of talk as needed. I hold the firm belief that, with the wise use of both ways, we can live a happier and promising life in the near future.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • text
  • texts
  • talk
  • phone
  • message
  • call
  • fast
  • easy
  • cheap
  • time
  • busy
  • reply
  • later
  • record
  • short
  • clear
  • tone
  • meaning
  • misread
  • friend
  • family
  • work
  • home
  • shy
  • nervous
  • help
  • group
  • plan
  • reach
  • everyone
  • care
  • rule
  • use
  • careful
  • balance
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