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The diagram shows the process of making wool.

The diagram shows the process of making wool.
The provided diagram illustrates how
wool
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 is made.
According to
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 the data, the process involves several sequential steps before diverging into two different pathways to create either strings or balls of yarn. As shown in the figure, the first step begins with breeding high-quality sheep to shear their woolly fleece by a shearer, which is done one to two times annually. After being collected and delivered to the processing facility, the
wool
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 is washed thoroughly to remove any dirt or contaminants and dried in the sun.
Next,
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the cleaned
wool
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 is spun by professional workers using a wheel-like hand-operated machine, resulting in either a
wool
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 or a string.
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 the string is used for recycling,
wool
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 is collected to form a tuft of
wool
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 and stored.
Finally
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, these stored yarns of
wool
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 are
then
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 used either for knitting, carpet, or clothes manufacturing.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words wool with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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