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The table below shows the household composition in a North American country from 1970 and 2003.

The table below shows the household composition in a North American country from 1970 and 2003.
The table below compares the proportion of different household types in North America from 1970 and 2003. Looking
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an
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the
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overall
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 structure, it is readily apparent that there is a noticeable increase in family
households
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 and non-family
households
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 with single and room sharing
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, except
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the
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 married couple
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, which
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 showed
significant
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a significant
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 decrease. In 1970, married couples were the 61% of
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majority but
this
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 notably dropped to 41% in 2003. Family
households
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 with father+kid slightly rose from 9% in 1970 to 10% in 2003
which
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, which
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 is similar to mother+kid. The other
member
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member's
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 share was 13% in 1970
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at the end
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 of the
period
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 it became 11%.
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, non-family
households
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 grew substantially. The proportion of people living alone tripled from 4% in 1970 to 13% in 2003.
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, room-sharing
households
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 saw a sharp rise from 3% to 11% over the same period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words households with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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