The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now

The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now
The map below illustrates a bookshop between 2000 and now.
Overall
Linking Words
, the bookstore was turned into
entertaining
Correct article usage
an entertaining
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place by adding new facilities
such
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as
cafe
Correct article usage
a cafe
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and tables. Despite
of
Change preposition
apply
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it, the entrance
side
Use synonyms
of it almost remained unchanged. Regarding the map in 2000 , on the north
side
Use synonyms
of it was
fiction
Correct article usage
a fiction
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book. After
entrance
Correct article usage
the entrance
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there
Punctuation problem
, there
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was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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located
Verb problem
apply
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travel
books
Use synonyms
and new
books
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. And on the right corner of the south
side
Use synonyms
was
service
Correct article usage
a service
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desk
and
Punctuation problem
, and
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next to it
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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located
Verb problem
apply
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non-fiction
books
Use synonyms
. Moving into
Correct article usage
the
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central part of
bookstore
Correct article usage
the bookstore
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, there
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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three rows
according to
Linking Words
books
Use synonyms
of art, hobbies and cookery. In today’s plan , the north
side
Use synonyms
of it is divided into five parts,
such
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as art, hobbies, cookery, fiction and non-fiction
books
Use synonyms
instead
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of a big fiction
Use synonyms
books
Fix the agreement mistake
book
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. The location
travel
Punctuation problem
, travel
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, new
books
Use synonyms
and service desk
is remained
Wrong verb form
remain
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unchanged.
Nevertheless
Linking Words
,
on south
Use the right word
in the southern
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part
of
Change preposition
apply
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it added new facility,
cafe
Correct article usage
a cafe
show examples
. And the central part of it is
also
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replaced
into
Change preposition
with
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tables ,
instead
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of three rows .

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "instead, such".
Vocabulary: Replace the words side, books with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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