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In future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

It is undeniable that
people
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 are becoming on the technology more and more before in today’s work
and
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consequently
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 they are trying to innovate
the
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apply
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driverless
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vehicles
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such
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, such
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 as
cars
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, buses and trucks and
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this
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which
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 results in
people
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can
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being able to
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 travel without driving
like
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, like
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 passengers.
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,
driverless
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vehicles
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 have some disadvantages
,
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this
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 essay argues that the advantages do outweigh the disadvantages. One of the drawbacks of using
driverless
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cars
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 is making wrong decisions when occurs a problem. First and foremost,
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 those make
people
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 safe when they travel,
it
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 cannot
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always be
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 accurate since it is a driving machine
instead
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 of a human.
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,
people
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 can use
cars
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 which are lacking drivers when they are travelling on highway roads rather than travelling in
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cities
of
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 very messy roads
and
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, and
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it
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they
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 will not be capable of self-driving on those types of roads or driving
to
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the
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hill
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hills
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as
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vehicles
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 are unable to make decisions
how
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the human does
if
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when
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 they face a problem
when
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while
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 driving.
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, there are some advantages of
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cars
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. It can be used for all
people
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 to reach their destinations.
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, it is very useful for some
people
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 who are disabled or others who are very old to drive in order to reach their destinations.
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, some young students who are under eighteen are able to use these
cars
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 as they don’t have
driving
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a driving
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licenses
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license
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.
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,
people
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 can travel safely without driving as sometimes human might be mistaken when they are driving after drunk.
To sum up
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despite
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although
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 using self-driving
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 can lead to some negative effects, there are many positive effects
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, and
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 the advantages do outweigh the disadvantages.

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structure
Start with a short, clear line that says your view on driverless cars. Keep one idea per paragraph and finish with a short end line.
content
Give more real and exact examples for both sides. For instance, talk about how drivers can fail and how a driverless car can help people with less use of effort. Include small numbers or facts if you can.
grammar
Use simple and clean grammar. Check word order and use 'because' to join ideas. Avoid long, messy sentences.
content
The writer shows a clear view that the good side has value.
structure
The essay uses a separate paragraph for each idea.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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