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The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now.

The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now.
The two maps illustrate the changes in bookshops from 2000 to nowadays.
Overall
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,
while
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 the bookstore changed a lot, some kind of things remained unchanged. As the
map
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 illustrates, in
2000
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2000,
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 the most popular type of
books
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 were fiction
books
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and
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, and
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 they took a lot of space. In the middle of the
map
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, there were other types of
books
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 like
art
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, hobbies and cookery
books
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. There were non-fiction
books
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 under it. On the right side of the
art
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books
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, there were travel and new
books
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. In the lower left corner, there was a service desk. On the right side of travel
books
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, there were entrances. Nowadays, the main entrance of the bookshop remains unchanged. Travel and new
books
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 remained unchanged
too
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, too
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. The non-fiction
books
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rebuilt
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were rebuilt
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to
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for
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cafe
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the cafe
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. In the middle of the
map
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 , the
art
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, hobbies and cookery
books
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 were reconstructed into tables for reading
books
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. All types of
books
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 stay at the top of the
map
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, there are
art
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, hobbies, cookery, fiction and non-fiction
books
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. The service desk at the bottom of the new
books
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 remained unaffected.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words map, books, art with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrate" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 3 times.
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