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In the past, when student did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? you should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Recently
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student
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students
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 will plan to study a
university
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 degree after they
grurate
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graduate
 from secondary school. Most of the
students
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 will choose to stay in their own
country
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, but there are still
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some
students
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choose
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who choose
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 to study abroad. There are advantages and disadvantages
between
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 it. For advantages to stay in their own
country
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,
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student
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students
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 have a sense of
belongings
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belonging
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on
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 their
country
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, they understand the culture and the language, so they do not need to spend time on
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 the
differernts
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differences
 of culture
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, and
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 as they are local
students
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, their school
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 could
support
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 by
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the govenment
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govenment
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government
.
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besides
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, the
students
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 who stay in their
country
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 would easier to find a job as the
university
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 degree
qulification
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qualification
 is certified.
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therefore
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, staying in
own
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their own
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country
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 to continue their studies is kind of a comfort zone for
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student
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students
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 to stay in a stable environment.
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however
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, if the
stuent
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student
choose
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chooses
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 to
studty
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study
aboard
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abroad
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, the
student
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 can try something new,
for example
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, learn their language, explore more
to
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of
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 the world, understand the culture
out
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outside
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 of their own city and
could
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apply
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make more foreign friends. It depends on how your
coice
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choice
 of choosing a
university
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,
student
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 can decide with their parent for the best option and
depends
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it depends
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the
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subject
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subjects
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 that are suitable for them or the banding of the school
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are
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always not
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 only one way for our future
, no
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. No
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 matter what choice you have made, it
would
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will
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 be
a
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an
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 unforgettable
memories
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memory
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 in your
university
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 journey.

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overall goal
To raise your score, add a clear view in the first line. Use 2 or 3 main ideas and talk about them with small examples.
structure
Make a plan before you write: paragraph 1 is the intro, paragraph 2 stays at home, paragraph 3 goes abroad, paragraph 4 yes? show a short conclusion. Each paragraph has one main idea.
cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like 'and', 'but', 'so', 'however', 'for example' to show how ideas go with each other.
grammar
Check word form and spelling. Some words are not right or are used in the wrong way. Use easy tense and form.
content
The essay shows a good idea of two sides: stay at home and go abroad.
linguistics
There is some use of contrast word like 'however' to show options.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural exposure
  • Educational quality
  • Language skills
  • Career opportunities
  • Global network
  • High costs
  • Homesickness
  • Cultural adjustment
  • Culture shock
  • Recognition of qualification
  • Language barrier
  • Prestigious institution
  • Employability
  • Education abroad
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