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Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access too much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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 it is widely accepted that the
internet
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 provides a lot of useful guidance or valuable advice.
However
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, troubles can
created
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 by
access
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accessing
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uncontroled
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uncontrolled
 information
are
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is
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also
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 a quite popular opinion. From my perspective, I partially agree with both points as their all giving some valid and considerable points.
In
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 the one hand,
searching
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search
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engine
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engines
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has
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have
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 saved billions
students
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of students
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 around the world by
provide
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providing
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 instant
accessable
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accessible
statistic
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statistics
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 or data. By that function, it greatly
enhance
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enhances
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 the efficiency of learning and
undoubtly
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undoubtedly
refined
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refines
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academic
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the academic
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 performance of the whole
wolrd
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world
 into a new era.
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, everyone can easily gather past papers from
previous
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the previous
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 year or semester or free lessons online. At some points,
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internet
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the internet
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 is actually providing more knowledge than school did.
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internet
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the internet
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by
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through
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number
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a number
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 of contacts or ads, fake news
have
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has
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 appeared and dominated about the incomes for
writters
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writers
while
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left
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leaving
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 a lot of detrimental impacts to the social.
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, during the
COVID 19
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COVID-19
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 pandemic, there was
a
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apply
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fake news about vaccines
killed
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killing
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peoples
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people
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, causing a
general
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generally
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bad
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negative
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attitudes
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attitude
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 toward the vaccine and the government and
resist
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resistance
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 to
take
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taking
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 the
vaccinate
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vaccine
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. As everyone predicted, a lot of people died
due to
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 refusing
vaccinate
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to vaccinate
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 from
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the gorvernment
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gorvernment
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government
. In conclusion, data provided by the
internet
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 is insanely helpful and practical most of the time.
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, the remaining minority may
contains
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contain
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 some dangerous information and
causing
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cause
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a
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an
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 unignorable negative
effects
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effect
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to
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on
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 the community.

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task
Make your main view clear in the first paragraph and stick to it.
grammar
Use correct phrases on the one hand and on the other hand.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words like first, next, also, but.
content
Give one clear example for each idea so readers see the link.
grammar
Check spell and grammar: fix common errors in spelling and word form.
structure
Keep ideas in separate paragraphs, each with one idea.
content
You write about both sides of the topic.
content
You give real life examples to show your point.
structure
There is a clear ending in your essay.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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