IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 3

Some people think that cities are the best place to live. Other prefect to live in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

I can see why people have different opinions on
this
Linking Words
 subject because
,
Punctuation problem
apply
show examples
 everyone sees it from a different perspective. City's are more likely to be the people's first choice there are many different reasons for that matter,
for example
Linking Words
 , the city's intend to have better education levels and it is more developed
then
Linking Words
 the small towns,
not to mention
Linking Words
 you can find anything that you need , shops, malls, great hospitals, museums, in a capital you can get entertainment , so as your basic needs, but it can be hard because of traffic, and it is very expensive to live in a place like that. Small towns are the
elders
Replace the word
elderly's
show examples
 ultimate favourite, fabulous nature,
in addition
Linking Words
 to a quiet
place
Punctuation problem
place,
show examples
 is exactly what you need when you want to clear your mind, and enjoy a mesmerising view
,
Punctuation problem
;
show examples
Linking Words
however
Punctuation problem
however,
show examples
 not everything is available in
a
Correct article usage
the
show examples
countryside
Punctuation problem
countryside,
show examples
 so you gonna face problems to
fulfill
Use the right word
fulfil
show examples
 your needs.
in
Fix capitalization
In
show examples
summary
Punctuation problem
summary,
show examples
 for my personal
opinion
Punctuation problem
opinion,
show examples
 both
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
show examples
 good in it's own way
,
Punctuation problem
.
show examples
me
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
personally I
Correct word order
I personally
show examples
 would live in a big city,
also
Linking Words
 get a summer house to enjoy the vacations, and whenever I felt the need to take a break from the
world
Punctuation problem
world,
show examples
 I would go there.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

plan
Make a clear plan: intro, view one, view two, your own view, and a short ending.
linking
Link ideas with simple words like and, but, also, however to join ideas.
content
Give a clear example for each point to show you can explain.
grammar
Check spelling and grammar, fix mistakes with apostrophes and tenses.
style
Keep sentences short and use plain words.
task
You show both sides and your own view.
content
You give ideas about city life and country life.
language
Your writing uses easy words that readers can follow.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »- a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • rural living
  • serene environment
  • bustling metropolis
  • career prospects
  • healthcare access
  • recreational facilities
  • urban sprawl
  • communal bonds
  • environmental sustainability
What to do next:
Look at other essays: