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Some people state arts courses such painting or drawing should not be made compulsory for high school students .To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is commonly believed that
arts
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the arts
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 have a good effect on
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students
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students'
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mind
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minds
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, espichly
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espichly
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especially
 during growing up. Some people argued that not all
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subjects
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 are important
to
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for
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the
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children to understand and believe in life.
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while
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 I agree that some courses are valuable for
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students
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students'
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life
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lives
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, I believe that some academic
subjects
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has
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have
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 a bad effect
to
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on
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 some people. On the one hand, one of the main reasons that courses help
students
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 to
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 problems and how they
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solve
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it
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them
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.
This
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because
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is because
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 some
teacher
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teachers
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 teach
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 with energy and love that influence the
childern
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children
 to understand it
easy
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easily
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 without
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difficulty
.
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, some
childern
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children
 said some
subjects
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on
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in
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 school made them discover their
taltents
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talents
such
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 as music, painting and writing and that
effect
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affected
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 their
live
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 completely.
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, it is
hoghly
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highly
 likely that some
chidlern
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children
 have
truble
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trouble
to understand
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understanding
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 things so
easly
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easily
.
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this
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 can be explained by the fact that not all
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subject
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subjects
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made
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are made
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 for the
students
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, either is
hars becuse
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harsh because
 of the
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difficulty
by
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of
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 the subject or the teacher
do
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does
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 not teach it very good.
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, a recent study
show
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shows
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 that most
of
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the
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student
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students
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 feel stress when they learn math and that
led
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leads
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 them to take on other
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such
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 as
arts
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arts,
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 to feel
relax
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 and happy. In conclusion, some
subjects
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 make
of
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apply
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students
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taltent
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talented
 and help them to
understaned
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understand
 the
worlf
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world
 around them.
Moreover
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, most of the
students
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 grow up when they face a problem
that is
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 hard and try to
slove
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solve
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 it by
themselfs
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themselves

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task-fulfilment
Make your position on arts in high school clear. State if you think arts should be required or not, in the intro and again in the end.
structure
Use one main idea in each paragraph. Start with a short line that tells what the paragraph will talk about, then give a detail.
language
Write with simple, correct words. Check spelling and grammar so the reader can get your point easily.
structure
The essay has an intro, body, and conclusion structure.
content
Your idea about math stress and turning to art shows some thought about the topic.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • arts
  • courses
  • painting
  • drawing
  • compulsory
  • high school
  • students
  • agree
  • disagree
  • express
  • creativity
  • development
  • skills
  • critical thinking
  • analyze
  • work
  • subjects
  • balance
  • stress
  • interested
  • communication
  • ideas
  • visually
  • interested
  • elective
  • requirement
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