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Band 4.5

A neighbor has damaged your car while parking. Write a letter to your neighbor explaining the situation and suggesting how they can resolve it.

Dear Mr. Singh, I am Rupinder Kaur
who
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 has been living in your
neighborhood
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 for
a
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the
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last
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 decade. I am writing
this
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 letter to explain the condition of my
car
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.
Last
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 night,
while
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 parking, you hit my
car
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.
As a result
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, my
car
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 got damaged. There are not only some scratches on it
but
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, but
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also
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 the bumper from the front has broken. As you know, repairing a
car
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 is quite expensive. Being a student, I cannot afford
it's
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its
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 cost. It is my humble request that
either you
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you either
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can
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pay my
car
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's repair bill or you can claim on your insurance to cover the cost. I am looking forward to your positive consideration. Yours faithfully, Rupinder Kaur.

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tone
Apologize for the accident and show you want a fair solution.
content
Add exact date/place of the incident and a short note on damage to be clear.
style
Break long sentences into short ones for easy reading.
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Suggest a clear next step with a date, for example: 'Please tell me by Friday what you will do.'
structure
Opening shows the reason for writing and keeps polite tone.
content
Gives a practical way to settle the issue.
tone
Overall polite and respectful close.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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