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65.The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

65.The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The pie chart provides key information about the proportion of folk who
work
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 after graduating from the Anthropology course,
whereas
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 the table illustrates their salaries after five years of
work
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. The units are measured in percentages. Clearly, the majority of
people
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 do full-time
work
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 ; the other paths are mostly unemployed or part-time
work
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.
According to
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 the data,
people
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 who do it full-time are divided into three freelance consultants, government sectors and private companies. The government sector pays the most after 5 years of
work
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, where 50% earn over 100,000 yearly.
On the other hand
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, the other two only get up to 30% or 40%.
For example
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, the majority of the crowd who worked full-time made up 52%,
whereas
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 the percentage of those working part-time was 15%.
Additionally
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, 12% were unemployed.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that there has been an increase in the percentage of
people
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 who have full-time
work
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.
In addition
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, there was a decrease in the percentage of
people
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 working in private companies,
while
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 a larger number had opportunities in the government sector and as freelance consultants.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chart
  • shows
  • what
  • graduates
  • after
  • finishing
  • degree
  • anthropology
  • most
  • many
  • some
  • few
  • work
  • study
  • job
  • career
  • full time
  • part time
  • public
  • private
  • path
  • trend
  • overall
  • in general
  • biggest
  • smaller
  • other
  • more
  • less
  • report
  • conclude
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