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The chart below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years.

The chart below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years.
The given bar charts compare five different countries in terms of film production during a 2-year
period
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 (from 2007 to 2009).
Overall
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, the number of
films
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 that were produced in three countries, B, C and E,increased
,
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 meanwhile,
country
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 D fluctuated a little. Notably,
country
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 A remained the dominant trend despite
it
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 decrease . Starting with an increasing number of
films
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,
country
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 B made roughly 50
films
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. At the beginning of the
period
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, it grew a little in 2008, displaying only 51
films
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,
while
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at the end
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 of the
period
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, it produced nearly 70
films
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.
Moreover
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, in 2007, about 8
films
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 were produced by
country
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 C, whilst in
country
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 E
was
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were
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 9
films
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. In the middle of the
period
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, they both went up , respectively, by 14 and 10 units, and in 2009, they produced around 16 and 11
films
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. Turning to
country
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 A, it was the highest trend during these three years. In the initial 2 years, it produced nearly 86 units, and declined to 80
,
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 in 2009.
According to
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 what is shown,
country
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 D made 15
films
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 in 2008, and experienced a slight drop to just under 10
films
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, and ended with 13
films
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, films, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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