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The table shows the number of universities ranked top 200 in the world in three subjects in five countries.

The table shows the number of universities ranked top 200 in the world in three subjects in five countries.
The table illustrates the number of
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 ranked in the top 200 worldwide in 2011 for three subjects, Biology, Medicine, and Psychology, across five countries.
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, it is evident that the United States dominated all three subjects, having far more
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 listed than the other four nations. The United Kingdom ranked
second,
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while
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Australia
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,
Canada
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, and New
Zealand
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 had significantly fewer institutions included. In Biology, the
USA
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 had the largest number at 69
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, more than double the United Kingdom’s 28.
Australia
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 and
Canada
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 followed with 9
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 each,
while
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 New
Zealand
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 had the lowest, with only 6.
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, in Medicine, the
USA
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 again led with 54, followed by the UK with 30.
Canada
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 and
Australia
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 had 13 and 12
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, respectively,
whereas
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 New
Zealand
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 was represented by only 2. Regarding psychology, a similar trend
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 the
USA
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 topped the list with 58, and the UK had 29.
Australia
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 had 17,
Canada
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 14, and New
Zealand
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 again came
last
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 with just 4
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. In summary, the
USA
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 and the UK were the leading nations in terms of highly ranked
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 in all three fields,
while
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 the other countries lagged far behind.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words universities, australia, canada, zealand, usa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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