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The two maps below show substantial changes of an island befor and after equipment of some tourist facilities.

The two maps below show substantial changes of an island befor and after equipment of some tourist facilities.
The two maps above
illustrates
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illustrate
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 considerable changes made on an island to facilitate tourism. At first glance, the island before
develpoment
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development
,
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apply
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 looks barren, with no
accomodation
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accommodation
,
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;
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however
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, there is an increase in
number
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the number
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 of habitable places in the map after development. There was no swimming place before, but, was made later near
beach
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the beach
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 area, to provide
safe
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a safe
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 location for
water- loving
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water-loving
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 tourists. They
also
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 established a restaurant
,
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apply
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 with
the
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a
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sea-view
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sea view
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 to offer dining facilities. The reception made, provides all the required information to the incoming people. There is
also
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 a pier, made for
safe
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the safe
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 landing of boats and yachts. Both footpath and vehicle tracks are made for the convenience of the people, who
,
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apply
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wants
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want
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 to walk around on foot, or travel by their
motors
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motor
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.
However
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, we can clearly see that despite
of
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apply
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significant changes made, the vegetation and greenery of the place remains undisturbed. Nobody interfered
in
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with
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flora
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the flora
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 of the area, which looks
same
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the same
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 on both
the
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apply
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maps.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, however".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provide" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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