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The chart shows the number of mobile phones and landlines per 100 people in selected countries.

The chart shows the number of mobile phones and landlines per 100 people in selected countries.
The bar chart compares the percentage of people
use
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who use
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 mobile
phones
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 and landlines per 100 people in seven different countries.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the popularity of the telephone is higher in some countries,
such
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 as Germany, the UK, Sweden, and Italy. Another notable point is that the number of landlines is
Canada
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in Canada
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, the US and
Denmark
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. As the graph shows, Land Lans twice higher amount cell
phones
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 in Canada as Mobile (38% and 62% respectively). The US,
Denmark
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 are the countries with the most landlines,Land Lines with just over 60% each. The number of
users
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users'
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phone
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phones
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 experienced
Germany
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in Germany
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 and
Denmark
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 areas the similar numbers each other. Turning to mobiles, Italy has the highest number of users
with
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, with
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 approximately 90%. The percentage of cell
phones
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 in
Denmark
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, the UK and Sweden is just over 80% double that of the US
just
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, just
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 under 40%. In Canada, people bought
phones
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 lower about 30% than Land Liner , with just over 60%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words phones, denmark with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 3 times.
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