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Students are becoming more and more reliant on the Internet. While the Internet is convenient, it has many negative effects and its use for educational purposes should be restricted. How far do you agree with this statement?

Unlike in the past, when most learners
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 on printed materials and traditional teaching methods, today the majority rely heavily on online sources.
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this
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 shift offers undeniable convenience, many argue that the
Internet
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 has harmful effects on students’ learning
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therefore
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therefore,
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 its use in education should be restricted. I strongly agree with
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 view, as excessive reliance on the
Internet
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 can undermine learning quality and students’ critical thinking. First and foremost, relying excessively on the
internet
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 can negatively affect learning outcomes. Many students use online platforms solely to obtain quick answers
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 of engaging in thorough study.
For instance
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, rather than reading a full academic text, they may prefer to summarise information from short blog posts or even copy content directly without proper comprehension.
This
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 habit leads to superficial understanding and
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 learners from developing a strong knowledge base. Another significant issue is that overdependence on online resources can weaken students’ sense of critical thinking. When information is readily available at the click of a button, learners may no longer practice evaluating sources or forming independent opinions.
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, they might accept the first result from search engines as fact without questioning its reliability.
Such
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 behaviour not only limits their analytical ability but
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 makes them vulnerable to misinformation. In conclusion,
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 the
internet
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 offers clear advantages, overreliance on it in education diminishes the quality of learning and hinders students’ intellectual growth.
Therefore
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, its role in the classroom should be limited, a view
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 I am in full agreement.

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content
Add one counter idea and show why it is not enough, then rest with your view.
structure
Use more linking words to show how each idea moves to the next.
language
Watch small grammar errors, like 'prevent' which should be 'prevents' in that sentence.
content
Try to give a little more detail on how the issue can be solved in school, and how teachers may use this view.
strength
Clear and strong view on the issue.
structure
The order of ideas is easy to follow.
content
Examples fit well with the point and are easy to see.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • independent learning
  • critical thinking
  • excessive reliance
  • hinder
  • crucial
  • problem-solving
  • overly dependent
  • diversity
  • perspectives
  • global cultures
  • enriching
  • unrestricted
  • information overload
  • discerning
  • credible sources
  • incorporation
  • engagement
  • adaptivity
  • personalized learning
  • innovative
  • pedagogy
  • digital age
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