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University education should be free for everyone, regardless of financial background. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

University
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 should be free for everyone, regardless of financial background.There is
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 argument over whether university
education
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 should be universally accessible for everyone irrespective of income. Despite admitting the decided benefit of free
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,I still believe it does more harm than good. Supporters of giving
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free access to higher
education
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 point to the benefits that the
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poor can
 reap.
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, they can receive
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as many educational opportunities as the rich
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 they can
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 acquire valuable knowledge through rigorous teaching and structured learning, and the lessons at universities are usually conducted by credible and
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 teachers.
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 means that after graduation, they can obtain a
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 qualification, leading a student to secure a decent occupation in the job market where they can earn a reasonable amount of salary.
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 results in a country narrowing the financial gaps in its community, as can be seen in the example of Finland
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 saw an equality in its society by implementing
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 policy.
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,
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theabove-mentioned
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the above-mentioned
 advantage, universities should be free of charge.
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 equitable free tertiary
education
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 may appear, I still believe that it ought to be paid due for some reasons. Little do those proponents know that free
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 may be economically unsustainable. The argument here is that
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university
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maydivert
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may divert
 resources from other more important sectors and channel the funds exclusively towards
education
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. An analogous example can be healthcare
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 may experience dire consequences of
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 a subsidy; they may not afford
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 equipment to treat patients. In
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 case, the rich could still receive medical services in other
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 countries, but the poor,
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 insufficient income, can be subjected to chronic health problems if not cured on time, contradicting the idea of parity.
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, to avoid
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detrimental
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 instances, students should be charged.
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,
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 I acknowledge the role of free higher
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 in ensuring equality, I still think that
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 benefit is removed when
education
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 is allocated
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much
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 funds,
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 my stance supporting paid
education
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.

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structure
Plan your essay with a clear map. Put your main idea in the first paragraph and a short plan at the end of the intro.
content
Make your main points stronger with more detail and more clear examples.
grammar
Check spelling and grammar. Fix common errors like run-on words and missing marks.
cohesion
Use linking words to join ideas, such as 'but', 'also', 'for example', and 'however'.
vocabulary
Choose simple and exact words. Avoid hard phrases and long forms.
stance
State your view clearly in the last paragraph and end with a firm sentence.
stance
The writer shows a clear view against free education.
example
There is a real example from Finland that supports the idea.
coherence
The middle part has some logical thoughts and points.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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