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The graph below shows the spending on research into renewable sources of energy in four countries between 1975 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the spending on research into renewable sources of energy in four countries between 1975 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph outlined the
expensed
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money
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on
study
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the study
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 of sustainable energy per
person
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 during 1975 and 2000 in four
european
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European
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 nations, which
is
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the
Switerland
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Switzerland
,
the
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Denmark,
the
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Spain, and
The
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 UK, respectively. In overview, the spending of the study
are
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 essentially the same in all
coutries
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countries
 in 1975, but the
spent
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amount
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amounts
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 were all different in 2000. For two countries with a risen trend, the
spent was
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 skyrocketed from zero to approximately 5 dollars per
person
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 in Switzerland, the highest
expenture
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expenditure
 in 2000. But in Denmark, it
was risen
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 to over 1 dollar after five years from the beginning and maintained the amount until 1990, following a significant increase to over 3
dollar
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 per
person
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 in 2000, which
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 the second highest spending
in
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 the four. The other two countries,
The
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Spain and the UK, the spending fluctuated between zero to 1 dollar per
person
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untill
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until
2000
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2000,
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 after a similar surge as it was in
the
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Denmark in 1980. The final spending was
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 higher in
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Spain
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 with the UK in 2000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words person with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • spending
  • expenditure
  • investments
  • renewable energy
  • trends
  • fluctuations
  • growth rates
  • comparative analysis
  • data representation
  • research funding
  • energy sources
  • historical trends
  • country comparison
  • significant changes
  • period under review
  • increase/decrease
  • economic implications
  • environmental impact
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