Wild animals have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Some people argue that wild
animals
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have no place in the modern world and
protecting
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that protecting
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them wastes resources.
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, I strongly disagree with
this
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view because wild
animals
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play a vital role in the ecosystem and benefit
humans
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in many ways.
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with, protecting wild
animals
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wastes resources, the main reason is 21st
century
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21st-century
technology has advanced rapidly.
Humans
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have several alternatives to access
food
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resources, which can improve human nutrition and extend lifespan.
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, scientists
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to invent biotechnology, which exploits DNA techniques to generate artificial fruit. It is beneficial to
humans
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for new
food
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supply methods
and
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, and
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solves the important issues of
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food
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the food
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crisis.
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, it is absurd to argue that wild
animals
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have no place on the Earth. In fact, they play an essential role in maintaining ecological balance.
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,
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if
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one species becomes extinct, it may influence the
food
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chain and
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as
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, as
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a result,
it
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apply
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affects
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affect
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human survival.
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, plants rely on butterflies and bees for pollination, which provides
food
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supply for
humans
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.
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, wild
animals
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contribute to medicine and medical research. In order to solve the problems of diseases,
humans
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use those species for animal experiments, which makes patients gain more proper treatment
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such
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, such
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as
cancer
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for cancer
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and mental health diseases. In conclusion,
although
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modern biotechnology has become more advanced, it is not an appropriate method to maintain the ecosystem. I believe protecting wild
animals
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can bring several benefits to
humans
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and keep the ecological chain sustainable.

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task
Be clear on your view in the start and in the end. Each paragraph should follow your main point.
coherence
Use easy links to show how ideas go one to the next, like and, but, so, then.
grammar
Check your sentence before you write. Use short, clean sentences. Break long lines.
vocabulary
Use common words. Some big words may be hard for many readers.
content
Your view is clear from the start.
structure
You give reasons to back your view.
organization
You use paragraphs to show ideas.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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