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1. Over the next five years, the table shows the costs for three distinct nature initiatives in US dollars. The project's estimated cost for the first year of setup is shown in the pie chart.

1. Over the next five years, the table shows the costs for three distinct nature initiatives in US dollars. The project's estimated cost for the first year of setup is shown in the pie chart.
1. The table illustrates expenditures for 3 different nature projects in United States
dollar
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dollars
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 over the next 5 years.The pie chart demonstrates
predicted
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the predicted
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 costing of the project for the first
year
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 of the
set up
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set-up
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. 2. For the
start up
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 of
new
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a new
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 project
at
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 different environmental requirements government allocated 60.5
million
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 for the first
year
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,
that
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 sets 10.5million for Africa,20million for America and 30million
to
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for
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 Asian countries.
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Moreover
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 investment dropped suddenly
at
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in
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 the second
year
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 since
overall
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 of the
donation
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overall donation
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only
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were only
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 39.5
million
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in
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, in
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 comparison with the first
year
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the
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, the
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 rate of investment became inadequate.The projected costing over the next five years experienced
lowering
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a decline
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.
For
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example
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example,
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at
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in
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 the fifth
year
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, donation
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donation
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donations
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forms
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form
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 3.5
million
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 for Africa, Central America shows 5
million
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,and the vast majority of donations
was
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were
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 for
South-east
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Southeast
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 Asia countries. 3.
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,the profiles for every
investments
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investment
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 include roughly equal
proportion
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proportions
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. 4. It is clear from the pie chart that about half of the expenditures
highlighted
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are highlighted
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 for salaries.Training and Office expenses
makes
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make
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 up only ten
percent
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per cent
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 in comparison with other fields
these
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; these
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 are
small
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a small
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 minority of all.As can be seen on the pie chart
nearly
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, nearly
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 a third of expenses
allocated
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are allocated
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 for the
set up
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set-up
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coasts
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costs
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "set" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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