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Some people believe that the radio is the best way to get news while others believe that TV is better for this purpose. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There is no denying the fact that some people believe that the radio is better than
TV
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 it is a commonly held belief that the radio is the best way to get news, there is
also
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 an argument that
TV
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 is better for
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 purpose.
This
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 essay will analyse
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 topic from both points of view and express my opinion. On the one hand,
TV
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 provides several benefits, like keeping you updated with the news and, powerful for advertising.
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, the television is good for education for all ages.
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, you can teach the children through learning programs.
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, if you feel bored, you can watch a movie
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 or a show.
On the other hand
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, wireless is more than
cheaper
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cheap
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than
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as
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TV
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. It’s portable,
people
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and people
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 can listen
while
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 driving,working, or exercising.
Moreover
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,
this
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 small device is good for quick and urgent information. In conclusion, there are no easy answers to
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 question.
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, I believe that television is greater than
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telephony; you will spend more money for one device with a lot of pros.

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content
Talk more on why each side is good and give a stronger reason for your own view.
structure
Use one idea per paragraph and link each with clear signs.
language
Use radio or radio news, not telephony. Be clear with words.
grammar
Check grammar and spelling. Fix 'more than cheaper' to 'cheaper'.
conclusion
End with a clear final idea that matches what you said at the start.
structure
Intro says what will be talked about and the view.
content
Two sides are shown with 'on the one hand' and 'on the other hand'.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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