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Some people think visual images（like photographs, videos) can tell information more accurately in a news story, while others think they are not reliable sources. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Some individuals
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 that visual
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 can provide information more effectively in a
news
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story
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,
whereas
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 others say pictures are not trusted
surces
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sources
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 will
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address
 both perspectives and
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 will give my opinion. On the one hand, newspaper
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 and photographs offer important visual support when it comes to understanding the
news
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, since it is easier for the reader to identify with a photo first than with a long paragraph.
According to
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 a study by the University of Arkansas, readers tend to form an initial opinion based on what they see, not on what they read or hear.
On the other hand
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, those who question the validity or veracity of visual sources point to their decontextualization or misuse. Many
images
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 tend to be taken out of context and
sensationalized
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 to invalidate or exaggerate a
news
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story
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 or event.
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, the statistical institute showed that a single photo or image of a
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story
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 or controversy attracted thousands of users,
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 a written statement attracted only a few.
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and
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 in
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 sense, one must be careful and corroborate the information with more reliable sources. Personally, I believe that the
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 themselves are not the problem, but rather the
story
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 with which they are presented and used.
To conclude
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, visual
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 are an important part of how
news
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 is presented, because they are the best way to situate oneself in the place of the facts.
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, they can
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 be misleading, and should be taken as a support to understand the
news
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,
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instead
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 of considering them as an unquestionable proof.

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development
Add more depth to each view with clear, simple examples from real life or news.
structure
Use clear topic sentences and simple sign posts to show the flow of ideas.
content
The essay opens with both sides and gives your view.
structure
There is a clear plan with an introduction, body parts, and a conclusion.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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