Your local council is considering closing a sports and leisure centre that it runs, in order to save money. Write a letter to the local council. In your letter -Give details of how you and your friends or family use the centre -Explain why the sports and leisure centre is important for the local community -Describe the possible effects on local people if the centre closes.

Dear Mrs Smith, I hope you
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this
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letter
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good condition. I am reaching out to express my concern regarding the leisure
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center
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, which is going to be
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close
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by
local
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the local
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council. Actually,
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sport
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center
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is
only
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one
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place for residents to spend quality time with their neighbours.
Childeren
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Children
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willing to play their games under the supervision of their elders.
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favourite
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of
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the town because of
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its location
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and facilities, which are provided by the council.
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, I go there for
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walk with my friends
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our minds.
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recretional
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recreational
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is reminding
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all dwellers about the owner of our hometown who did
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many things to make
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town
wellknown
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well-known
in the city. If it does demolish
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then
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the speciality of the town will be gone.
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center
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is situated far away from busy areas,which gives a peaceful environment to people
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spending time
overthere
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there
.
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,
lack
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the lack
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of other
playground
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playgrounds
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and
recrteational
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recreational
centers
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,
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it would make
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would make it
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difficult for
childern
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children
to play games in
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the streets
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. I hope you
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reconsider your decision and find
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alternative solution. I look
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forward
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favourable response.
Thankyou
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for
yours
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attention. Yours
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faithfully
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, Abdul.

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improvement
Fix many spelling and word mistakes. Use simple, clear words. Add a short plan of what you want the council to do.
structure
Split the text into clear parts. Start with a short opening, then a body with two or three ideas, then a short finish. Each part has one main idea.
cohesion
Use linking words to connect ideas, like also, therefore, but to show order and reason.
content
The letter shows care for the town and people.
tone
The tone is polite and formal.
community
You mention how the centre helps children and keeps the town calm.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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