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Writing Samples
Band 5

The diagram below shows how one type of coal is used to produce electricity

The diagram below shows how one type of coal is used to produce electricity
The flow chart describes the way of using
a
Correct article usage
apply
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coal to produce
electricity
Use synonyms
.
Overall
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, there are nine stages in the whole
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electricity producing
Use the right word
electricity-producing
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 process, beginning with digging up coal from
mine
Correct article usage
a mine
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 and ending with delivering
electricity
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 to the houses and factories.
To begin
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, the coal is
digged
Verb problem
dug
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 from
mine
Correct article usage
the mine
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 and delivered to
crusher
Correct article usage
the crusher
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 to
divide
Wrong verb form
be divided
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 into small parts , which
make
Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
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 it easier to deliver. After delivering it to the gasifier, it is heated to
take
Verb problem
produce
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 gas.
Subsequently
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, the gas is cooled before dividing it
two
Change preposition
into two
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 stages,
such
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 as waste heat and cleaning process. After
cleaning
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the cleaning
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 process, it is passed to
gas
Correct article usage
a gas
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 power plant, where
has
Correct pronoun usage
it has
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 waste heat again. The final step is delivering the ready
electricity
Use synonyms
to
Change preposition
for
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 usage to the houses and
factrories
Correct your spelling
factories
.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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