The chart below gives information about European people of different age groups who went to the gym once a month or more between 1990 and 2010.

The chart below gives information about European people of different age groups who went to the gym once a month or more between 1990 and 2010.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below gives information about European people of different age groups who went to the gym once a month or more between 1990 and 2010.
The line graph compares four
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age
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groups
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in terms of went to the athletic club once a month or more from 1990 to 2010.
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the
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all
age
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groups
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started almost at the same point and experienced consistent increases in the
twenty year
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twenty-year
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period.
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addition
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the percentage of younger
groups
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who went to the gym
were
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was
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higher compared to
medium
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middle-aged
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age
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groups
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the group of youths started at 10% in 1990 , and it peaked at 60% in 2006, which remained unchanged until 2010. Meanwhile , in the group
adults
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who are between 25-
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there is a rapid increase, starting at around 10% in 2010 and reaching 50% in 2010.
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, the group of
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middle-aged
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age
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people who are around 35-44 experienced
upward
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an upward
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trend, starting at 7% in 1990,
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it rose gradually to approximately 20% in 2006, before witnessing rapid growth to 40% in 2010. Regarding the elderly people who are 45 years old showed the lowest results compared to other
age
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groups
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instance
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it started 5% in 1990 and increased only to 20% by growing gradually within 20 years.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, groups with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rapid" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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