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it is sometimes said that people should be encouraged to get married before they are 30, as this is the best both for the individual and for society, do you agree or dissagree?

The question of whether it is best to be wed before being 30 is highly debated. I strongly believe that it is most sufficient to be emotionally ready first before settling into married life. Because by being mentally mature, couples tend to be more prepared for hardships that they may encounter since they have already faced their
quarter life
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 crisis during their 20s. Being married after 30 may increase the chances of having a much better emotional intelligence and financial stability that can provide a strong family foundation.
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, the couple can plan their household future. If they are interested in having children, they can start to save up for the child’s education and allocate money into different sectors for the baby’s needs.
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 the other hand, some people argue that marrying earlier has their own advantages. Many people feel like getting married before 30 gives more time to build a family and figure things out together,
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 it is
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 easier to raise a child
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 the parents are still in their prime.
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,
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 marriage may cause stress if the couple is still underprepared, and that may lead to unwanted circumstances like affairs and divorce.
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, it is important to plan marriage well before having a family without preparation. In conclusion, I personally believe that there is no best timing when it comes to marriage. If both sides are prepared and willing to shape what lies ahead, I am sure that they can sort out whatever comes their way. But I would
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 like to highlight that having a supportive environment can decrease the burdens of starting a family. Because when
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 time comes, they have a support system
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 there for them no matter what.

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task
State your view clearly in the first line and keep it in the rest of the essay.
coherence
Use the phrase 'On the other hand' instead of 'In the other hand' and add clear link words.
structure
Put ideas in a good order: intro, 2 or 3 main points, and a short finish.
examples
Give a stronger example for each point to be sure the reader sees the proof.
grammar
Fix small grammar and spelling errors, such as 'wed' and 'quarter life crisis'.
lexical
Keep short, simple sentences. Use only common words.
content
The writer shows a view that there is no best time to marry.
content
The writer gives ideas about money and plan for kids.
structure
The essay tries to be fair and talk for both sides.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • agree
  • disagree
  • early
  • late
  • marry
  • marriage
  • age
  • person
  • life
  • home
  • work
  • study
  • money
  • plan
  • ready
  • family
  • children
  • risk
  • benefit
  • advantage
  • disadvantage
  • reason
  • example
  • culture
  • society
  • policy
  • support
  • choice
  • point
  • evidence
  • idea
  • opinion
  • question
  • perhaps
  • but
  • and
  • so
  • because
  • if
  • when
  • before
  • after
  • not only... but also
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