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In many countries government are interesting in new technology to deal with the public. Why is this happening Do you think this is an appreciate use of government money?

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governments
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Governments
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 around the world are trying to advance in many
ascpects
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aspects
some
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. Some
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 may invest in
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infrastructure
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while
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 others explore urban developments. Some
governments
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 invest in technological
reserch
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research
 to better serve the public
exploring
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, exploring
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apps
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 and
website
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websites
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 to
offer
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 services and
recive
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receive
complains
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. In my
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opinion,
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 spending money on new technologies is a must
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because
 it will help them conduct
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faster
 transactions and
simplfy
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simplify
 procedures.
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 good reason why
governments
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 should use capital money in new technologies is it they can develop
apps
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 that can reduce
transactions
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transaction
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 time. Using
apps
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 and
website
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websites
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 to
offer
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 simple
transctions
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transactions
 online for the public without having the need to visit a
sepecific instatute
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specific institute
 that may be far from a
citizins
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citizen's
 home.
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, in the past in
Oman
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Oman,
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i
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I
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 had to go all the way to the electrical
compnys
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company's
 office to pay the electrical bill
but
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, but
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 now
i
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I
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 can easily pay my bill with a single tap through the
app
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cutting
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 the time to a fraction. Not only that
such
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apps
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allowed
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allow
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 us to finish
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several
 services in
one
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 place.
Moreover
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, the
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governments
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government's
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 efforts in creating
such
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app
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an app
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 allowed the public to finish more than
one
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 service in a single
app
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, simplifing
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simplifing
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simplifying
 the procedures.
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this
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This
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 technology allowed the public to pay more than
one
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 bill using he same
app
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connecting
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, connecting
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 many governmental
intties
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entities
.
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for
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For
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 instance, using
t he
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the
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 same
app
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, i
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i
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I
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 can pay electric bills, water bills and even police fines.
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this
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 opened the gate to connect the information within the public sector
allowing
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, allowing
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 them to share information. In summary,
govermnts
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governments
 should invest in new technologies to better connect with the public
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, espcially
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espcially
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especially
 in our
fast ppaced
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fast-paced
 digital world and
offer
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apps
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 and
website
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websites
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 to cut the
transactions
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transaction
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 time and
offer
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 easier procedures.

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structure
Begin with a clear intro that states your view and end with a short conclusion.
coherence
Use linking words to tie ideas together and group points in order.
language
Check spelling and use short, simple sentences. Use common words.
focus
Idea of using tech in public service is good and relevant.
example
You use a real example from Oman to show your point.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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