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The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.
The line figure
illustrate
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illustrates
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 a
combersion
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comparison
about
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of
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 the cost of bananas in four different countries from 1994 to 2004.
Overall
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, the fees
of
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for
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banana
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bananas
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 vary between the selected regions. Three countries ( Japan-France-Germany)
shows
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show
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 a
fluculating
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fluctuating
patterns
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pattern
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,
while
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USA
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the USA
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 remains stable
most
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for most
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 of the
period
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.
First
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First,
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 Japan faced
a
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apply
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dramatic changes in the given
period
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. It rose sharply in the beginning
reaching
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, reaching
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 nearly 3
dollar
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dollars
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 for one kilogram in 1995
but
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, but
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 it
drops
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dropped
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 to 1.90
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dollars
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dollar
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dollar,
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then
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demonstrate
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demonstrated
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 a stable pattern before it
fluctuate
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fluctuated
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 again
in
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at
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 the end of the
period
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 to
rose
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rise
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 in 2004. France was stable in the given years with 1.70 for one kilo of bananas
but
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, but
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 it
has
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had
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 a small drop in 2002. Germany and
USA
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the USA
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 both
has
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have
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 no dramatic fluctuations. For
Germant
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Germany
 it starts with 1.40
in
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at
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 the start and 1.25
at the end
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 of the
period
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, and in
USA
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the USA
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which
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, which
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 was the most
unchangable
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unchanged
 between them all,
start
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starts
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 with 0.90 cents to
slight
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a slight
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 increase
with
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to
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 1.10
dollar
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dollars
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.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drops" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuate" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend
  • Fluctuate
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Stable/Stability
  • Significant
  • Gradual
  • Sharp
  • Slight
  • Peak
  • Plummet
  • Spike
  • Level off
  • Dip
  • Plateau
  • Cost
  • Price
  • Currency
  • Decade
  • Year-on-year
  • Economic factors
  • Consumer demand
  • Inflation
  • Market forces
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