The chart below shows the numbers of three types of visitor to a museum between 1997 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the numbers of three types of visitor to a museum between 1997 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below shows the numbers of three types of visitor to a museum between 1997 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The bar chart illustrates the numbers of
adult
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visitors
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,
visitors
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aged under 15, and special exhibition
visitors
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in
museum
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the museum
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between 1997 and 2012, with the figures expressed in thousands.
Overall
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, it can be observed that the
adult
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visitors
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increased rapidly over the years,
while
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visitors
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aged under 15 decreased over the years. In 1997,
adult
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visitors
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stood at 300100
visitors
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, compared to
visitors
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aged under 15 at 120000. Over the next 15
years
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years,
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the number of
adult
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visitors
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increased
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by
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380000. By
2012
Punctuation problem
2012,
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adult
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visitors
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nad
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had
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risen to 380000,
while
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special exhibition
visitors
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42000
Verb problem
were 42000
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,
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visitors
Correct word choice
and visitors
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aged under 15
82300
Verb problem
were 82300
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.
This
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indicates
that
Correct determiner usage
a
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comparison.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words adult, visitors with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "numbers of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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