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You have just won two tickets to a concert and want to invite your friend to go with you. In the letter • give details about the concert • describe how you won the tickets • explain why you have chosen your friend to go with you

Dear Jass, I hope you are doing well. I am thrilled to tell you the news that I have recently won two tickets to Diljit Dosanjh's concert
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 happening on the 29th of September, 2025 , and I am more than happy to tell you that you are coming with me. Recently, in college, I took part in a spelling bee competition. I already won the two rounds before , but I was extremely nervous about the third one , and when I was announced that I have won that, I was handed two tickets to the show by the vice-president of the university. I cannot explain the purge of emotions that I felt during that time that which was the show of our childhood favourite singer. You know that you have been my right hand in all crimes , and we have experienced every happiness and sorrow together , so how could
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 forget about you when
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 won the tickets? I am letting you know that we will go to the concert together.
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, it has been a long time since we haven't met and how about a dinner before the show? I wish to see you soon. Yours lovingly, Bableen

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grammar
Fix grammar and spelling in small parts. Use 'I' with a capital and a full stop. Short, clear sentences are easier to read.
structure
Make the plan clear in fewer steps. Start with the news, then say how you won the tickets, then say why you ask your friend.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas go from one to the next, e.g., 'first', 'also', 'finally'.
word choice
Change hard words like 'purge of emotions' and 'crime' to simple, true words that fit a letter.
content
Explain one or two reasons why you pick this friend. It will make the letter feel warm and real.
format
End with a good closing line and your name so the letter fits the form.
tone
You share big news in a warm, friendly way.
content
You tell what the concert is and when it will happen.
structure
You plan a meal before the show, which makes the plan feel real.

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