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Take a look at the graphics and complete the task. The table and chart show data about reading among people under 30 years old. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Take a look at the graphics and complete the task. The table and chart show data about reading among people under 30 years old. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of different groups of
age
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 groups, divided by the type of
book
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 they read.
Moreover
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, the table gives details about
book
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 reading within each
age
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group
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.
Overall
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, print
books
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 were by far the most popular choice across all ages,
while
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 the most active
age
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group
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 regarding reading activities was 16-17. Regarding the
book
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 types,
it is clear that
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 the popularity of types other than print
books
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 was around the same for all ages except the first
group
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 (16-17),in which the audiobooks were the least favourite selection , with approximately 15% and
then
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 e-
books
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 with just slightly above 20%. In the printed
books
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, there was a reverse trend shown
in contrast
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 to
age
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, starting from around 85%,
then
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 declining to somewhere around 71% for the
last
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group
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. Regarding the detailed table, the data trend to address the percentage of people within each
age
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 class that has read one
book
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 was declining gradually , as the
age
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 grew( starting from 90% to ending in 81%). Meanwhile, the average number of
books
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 read by people remained approximately the same for all
age
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 classes.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, book, group, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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