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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

The question of whether
information
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 should be freely shared or restricted behind paywalls has generated widespread debate.
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 some argue that unrestricted
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 promotes academic and social progress, others maintain that valuable data should require payment. I side with the latter view, as protecting intellectual property and rewarding contributors are essential. Advocates of free
access
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 contend that open
information
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 is vital for
research
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 and innovation. When scholars have immediate
access
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 to prior findings, they can avoid duplication and build upon existing knowledge more efficiently.
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, open-source databases in medicine allow researchers worldwide to collaborate in finding cures for diseases, saving both time and resources.
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, free sharing is often associated with accelerated academic and scientific advancement.
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, others argue convincingly that charging for valuable
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 is necessary to protect confidentiality and safeguard competitive advantages. Many corporations invest heavily in
research
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 that underpins their market leadership, and releasing
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information
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 without compensation could
jeopardize
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 their survival.
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,
research
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 is labour-intensive; authors deserve to receive financial recognition for their intellectual contributions.
For
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 reason, academic journals and databases often require subscription fees to sustain quality
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 and fairly compensate contributors. In conclusion,
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 free
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 to
information
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 may foster faster collaboration and innovation, I firmly believe that significant
information
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 should not be freely available. Charging ensures the protection of sensitive data and provides fair rewards for the efforts of those who generate new knowledge.

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Task response
Show both sides with the same depth. add more facts or ideas for the other view.
Coherence
Link ideas with clear linking words to help flow (for example: but, also, however, so).
Lexical
Keep word choice simple and check if any hard word is needed; prefer easy vocabulary.
Structure
Clear stance and conclusion
Content
Good use of examples to back ideas
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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